Thursday, October 15, 2009

THE BOSS (My theses please edit)

The history of fight is a very important innovation which saves time and money in to send stuff around the world instead of using boats.
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  1. Fleming101October 15, 2009 at 10:02 AM

    I think this is a title, not a thesis.

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  2. Fleming101October 15, 2009 at 1:49 PM

    who is this???????????????????????????????????????????

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  3. Fleming101October 16, 2009 at 9:26 AM

    You're getting closer. Now you have a thseis. Think about it a little broader. Have planes changed how we interact with the world, beyond shipping "money and stuff"? -QE

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  4. Fleming101October 21, 2009 at 1:00 PM

    You might consider the word choice. Remember this is a competition you'll sound more impressive if you use different word choice. -HQ

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